Trochę monotonne i toporne jak na mój gust, więc pozwoliłem sobie ulepszyć nieco, zachowując prymitywną fabułę oraz dziecinny styl:
Mary had been living a lonely life until one day she faced the truth: 'I must find a soulmate'. Opportunity came by itself, when she bumped into a web site listing many promising candidates. In a short time almost ninety users answered her call.
'Hey love, wanna get to know me?' asked one of them.
'Why not?' replied Mary and continued virtual conversation with great excitement.
After she had acknowledged many warm-hearted propositions, she joyfully got off her desk and took a shower. The water had been massaging gently her body, giving her sense of comfort she had not experienced for months. Wrapped in a delicate robe she went to bed, but just when a deep sleep was to embrace her body with sweet dreams, she heard a strange noise coming from above; a small rodent had been rattling across the ceiling or it seemed so…
I can't take credit for it, because this isn't my story.
I just tried to point you in a right direction. You should read some good English prose before publishing. I recommend Charles Dickens and Mark Twain to start with, but if you want to see what a native Polish speaker is capable of, go for Joseph Conrad. Then you will know what I mean.
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Mary had been living a lonely life until one day she faced the truth: 'I must find a soulmate'. Opportunity came by itself, when she bumped into a web site listing many promising candidates. In a short time almost ninety users answered her call.
'Hey love, wanna get to know me?' asked one of them.
'Why not?' replied Mary and continued virtual conversation with great excitement.
After she had acknowledged many warm-hearted propositions, she joyfully got off her desk and took a shower. The water had been massaging gently her body, giving her sense of comfort she had not experienced for months. Wrapped in a delicate robe she went to bed, but just when a deep sleep was to embrace her body with sweet dreams, she heard a strange noise coming from above; a small rodent had been rattling across the ceiling or it seemed so…
I can't take credit for it, because this isn't my story.
I just tried to point you in a right direction. You should read some good English prose before publishing. I recommend Charles Dickens and Mark Twain to start with, but if you want to see what a native Polish speaker is capable of, go for Joseph Conrad. Then you will know what I mean.
Ta-ta for now. ?
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